Tuesday, 21 August 2018
Lucas M t3w5
I check my mail and open the top one. As I read the letter, I was aware of the smile on my face. I pack all my stuff in my bag and ran through the door and caught the first flight to America. I was called take over New York. I'm the best shooter in the world. They had already started taking parts of the city. The plane lands and I run through customs where a cab is already waiting for me. I join the battle we just took over 80% of the city. The super hero couldn't save the world this time.
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I really like the way you said what was happening all the time.
ReplyDeleteWhen you said I was called take over New York it doesn't quite make sense so you might want to change it.