Sunday, 5 August 2018
T3W2
Yesterday we went to the beach, now usually I like the beach but it had been raining all morning so it was going to be all soggy but it was worse. When we got there the beach was gone nothing but water. I get that it rained but I'm pretty sure it wasn't that bad. I looked around to see if something else could be causing this, I saw a pipe that went into the water I went to inspect it. It looked like it was pumping water into the flood, I flicked a lever and all the water went.
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This is a good story, but your first sentence has two but, without reasonable punctuation, it will make people feel confused.
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