Wednesday, 22 August 2018

T3W5 Arjan

My Brother went on an expediated around the world I really missed him it was lonely. One day I was watching the news and the news people said there was a mass killing in Australia I was worried because he was in Australia that day. Usually, he sends a letter every 5 days but today he didn't that made me VERY worried I started to wonder if he's okay, I asked every hospital around the area of the mass killing and they said they don't have him, but as a read a letter I found I was aware of the smile on my face, he was ok.
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  1. Anonymous22 August 2018 at 22:06

    I really like your storyline! Just change your spelling of expedition and there are a few bits that don't quite make sense.

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  2. Anonymous22 August 2018 at 22:07

    I really liked your story. Next time try and check you spelling because a few things didn't make sense because the words were spelt incorrectly. Great job 👍😀

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  3. Anonymous26 August 2018 at 01:29

    great story just check spelling and make was aware of the smile on my face, he was ok same font

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