I was laying on my bed when my dad walked into the room with a box. He had come from my grandparents house.
"Hey, can you sort through this?" he asked.
"Sure, what is it?" I replied.
"Just some junk your grandparents wanted me to throw away." he said.
"Okay then."
As I was sorting through the box I found a letter. As I read the contents of the letter I was aware of the smile on my face.
"Dad!" I yelled.
"What?" he replied.
"Look what I found, a letter from great grandfather." I exclaimed.
"Wow, It can't be."
Wednesday, 22 August 2018
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I like how you used speech marks and new line when someone else was speaking
ReplyDeleteI liked how your piece of writing was mostly a conversation. Next time try and use some different words instead of said and replied, like cried or beamed. Great job. 👍😀
ReplyDeleteThis is a really good piece of writing, especially showing what we have been learning in class! Remember it needs to be a comma instead of a full stop before you put ending speech marks.
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