As I read the contents of the letter I was aware of the smile on my face. I was happy, the happiest I had ever been. My face was so bright and emotional. It was my Mums letter she was alive I hadn't heard from hear in two years she was alive I couldn't believe it .
"Shes coming back," I yelled
She is coming back from being a nurse at gallipoli. It was so nice to hear she was coming back and we will be able to do fun things as one big family.
Tuesday, 21 August 2018
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good description on your smile next time don't put gaps in between the new lines.
ReplyDeleteI really like this piece of writing, good use of use of descriptive words,
ReplyDeletemaybe for this line It was my Mums letter she was alive I hadn't heard from hear in two years she was alive I couldn't believe it put some commas in
other than that is was really good