Wednesday, 1 August 2018
t3w2
It had been raining all morning, It was a boring day so I sat all that wet day.I was sitting there for a hour when I hear "knock,knock FBI open up!" I run to the door I open it instantly I'm blinded by lights from the guns."what's going on?" I say "we have to search the house for a bomb"said the agent "a bomb!" I yell. I go back to my seat while my house was smashed, bashed and thrashed. It felt like forever when someone said that they found it.The world was saved once again.
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I loved all of the action and descriptive words. It was a good quick easy read. I would have a look at making a better hook though.
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